Research Paper

Riley Pavelich
Research Paper- Darfur
Advanced Comp.
16 April 2008


The average person on the street recalls the holocaust or the slaughter in Rwanda, but it is shocking how few realize that those types of situations are occurring at this very moment in Darfur. Most people know something about the situation in Darfur; however, very few really understand it. In order to fully comprehend the state of affairs, one must first know the background of Darfur, the history of the conflict, possible solutions, and why it has spiraled out of control.

Some people are under the misconception that Darfur is a country. It is actually a region in Sudan, an African country that borders the Red Sea. Although rich in natural resources, the country suffers from “overpopulation, desertification, and drought” (“War” par.2). In 2003 Sudan’s population density was 34 people for every square mile (Nations Encyclopedia par. 1). Since 1998 there has been a drought in Sudan and it has shown no signs of stopping.

Sudan enjoys a rich and vibrant culture, though it has always seemed to be plagued by war and unrest, especially the region of Darfur. Since February 15 2003, Darfur has been engaged in a bloody dispute. The two main factions involved in the disagreement are the African tribes and local Arabs. Conflict initially arose because of the supposed or actual favoring of Arab citizens above others by the Sudanese government. The government responded to these accusations by supporting the Janjaweed, an Arab militia. The non- Arab population countered the Janjaweed by forming the Sudanese Liberation Army and the Justice and Equality Movement (“War” par. 1).

The Sudanese Liberation Army (SLA) has several different factions headed by different people. The group headed by Minni Minnawi has now sided with the government and is generally hated among Darfurian citizens because he is now aligned with the group he was initially fighting against. Abdulwahid Mohamed Nour, another leader of the SLA continues to fight the government and is supported by the public (“Sudan Liberation Mov.” Par.2).
This situation has many small parts and underlying causes. Another piece of this confusing and bloody puzzle is China. The Chinese government has frequently opposed economic sanctions against Sudan. Also, a Chinese company, Petrochina, is in command of about 2/3 of Sudan’s oil (Darcy par. 18). There is evidence that the Sudanese government bought about 100 million dollars worth of weapons from China (“War” par. 20). Many experts suspect that China is against economic sanctions because of their oil interest.

As of September 21, 2006 the official United Nation death count was over 400,000 (“War” par. 32). It is important to consider that the death rate in Darfur is seven times greater than what is expected (WHO pg. 5). The majority of those dead are of African lineage. Also, as many as two million refugees have been driven from their homes. Many of them seek shelter in Chad; however most of the refugee camps in Chad are surrounded by the Janjaweed and under their authority. They are much like concentration camps. According to a World Health Organization report, the main cause of death in these camps is diarrhoeal. Deaths of diarrhea are “likely to reflect poor environmental sanitation,” reported the same study. Why has Darfur garnered so much international attention? One possible answer is the Janjaweed’s tactics. They use murder, rape and torture as weapons of war. After pillaging a village, they poison wells with the bodies of the dead (Kayla par. 7). In a country where water is scarce, poisoned drinking water is just as deadly as bullets or knives.

A surprising effect of this conflict is the avoidance of the term genocide. Genocide, as defined by the Random House Unabridged Dictionary is “the deliberate and systematic extermination of a national, racial, political, or cultural group.” This term could apply to Darfur because of the Janjaweed’s frequent mass murders, rapes, and other terrorist actions against the African tribes people. However, many countries and organizations avoid using the word genocide when discussing Darfur. The United Nations has not yet used the term. Surprisingly, the United States has called the situation genocide. Countries stay away from saying the word because doing so would require them, by international law, to aid Darfur (UN art. 3). It is against the law to be “complacent in genocide.”

Why would a country not want to aid Darfur? One reason is that it might anger China, who has become a world power and is very wealthy. Also, the conflict has been so bloody, many countries do not want to send troops into such a dangerous area. Because they believe that some organizations that sent troops that claim to be neutral actually support the government, the SLA has staged attacks against peacekeeping forces sent into their country. The very people the forces were sent into aid sometimes retaliate against them!

So far, the UN has done little to prevent the war. Although they have pledged to provide up to 26,000 troops, only about a third of that number were deployed. The UN has also passed more than a dozen sanctions against the Sudanese government, but have not followed through with them. Some blame the UN’s lack of action on China and Russia, both members of the group. According to the Human Right’s Watch, those two counties do not support drastic measures taken against Sudan because of “ideological commitments (non-interference in internal affairs of member states) and both have economic interests in Sudan” (“Q and A” par 26-27). Although most nations agree that the way to lasting peace in Darfur is a peace treaty, not an increase of forces, many countries are weary of stepping up their pressure on Sudan until the US has done so.

The Arab militia, with the help of the Sudanese government, has become very powerful. To help counter this threat, the African Union and United Nations has sent troops to try to establish peace. Many countries are pressing the United Nations to send more peacekeeping troops into the country. Thousands of Americans are calling for President Bush to increase the pressure on Darfur. Several countries, including France, are calling for a boycott of the Chinese Olympic Games. New organizations, entirely devoted to aiding Darfur, have sprung up, including “Save Darfur” and “Darfur is Dying.” “Save Darfur” claims that its goal is to “encourage global advocacy on behalf of Darfur.”

So who is to blame in this mess? Could one accuse the international community for not intervening? Maybe the guilt lies with the Sudanese’s government for supporting the Janjaweed. Perhaps China’s supplying weapons to Sudan entitles them to some responsibility. Regardless of who could have stepped in to help or who abetted Sudan, one begins to understand why the situation is so complicated. Resolving the situation would take the cooperation of several different nations and a massive amount of resources.

It is interesting to note that a similar event occurred in Africa in 1994, which is known as the Rwanda Genocide. In both situations an enter-country dispute ended in many deaths. The genocide lasted only 100 days, but between 800,000 and 1,000,000 people died (“Rwandan Genocide” par. 1”). In contrast to Darfur, Rwanda’s genocide was committed by the smaller, less powerful ethnic group. Rwandan’s situation was eventually resolved by a peace treaty. Many have called Darfur “Rwanda repeating itself.” So why was this situation resolved in only 100 days? Darfur’s war has been dragging on for four years. Maybe it is because in four years there has only been 400,000 casualties as opposed to 800,000 in 100 days. Also, the Rwandan government allowed other countries to help them resolve the situation, unlike the Sudanese. Far more nations have economic interests in Sudan than in Rwanda and it seems as if the relief effort for Darfur has been stalled, wrapped up in red tape and political apathy.

The situation, bleak as it may be, will hopefully be resolved soon. If more people knew the history of Darfur, the background of the conflict, potential resolutions, and why it has become such a disaster, Darfur would be one step closer to being saved.

Works Cited

Darcy, Ailbhe. “Darfur is a right mess-but that does not absolve us.” Taking it Global:
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Kayla. “Devastation in Darfur.” Taking it Global: Panorama. November 16 2007.
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“Q. & A.: Crisis in Darfur.” Human Rights Watch. 25 April 2008. 14 May 2008. <http://www.hrw.org/english/docs/2004/05/05/darfur8536.htm>.

“Rwandan Genocide.” Wikipedia. 14 May 2008. 14 May 2008. <http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rwandan_Genocide>.


“Sudan Liberation Movement.” Wikipedia. 19 April 2008. 14 May 2008. <http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sudan_Liberation_Movement>.


United Nations General Assembly. Convention on the Prevention and Punishment of Genocide. 27 January 1997. 30 April 2008. <http://www.hrweb.org/legal/genocide.html>.


“War in Darfur.” Wikipedia. April 11 2008. April 11 2008. <http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Darfur_conflict.com>.


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Taking it Global

Taking It Global didn't have too much information on the genocide in Darfur, the topic I will be reaserching. I did find one site, however. TIG had a link to Save Darfur Canada, a group devoted to spreading info and involving normal people in Darfur's struggles. The site was more aimed at getting people involved in the situation than actually teaching about it. I didn't learn very much, except how to join the program.

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Shine Perfect

Are you comfortable being woman

Bornze beauty burden

why not discover sunshine

top-to-bottom miracle

reveal your talent for life

Found Poem

Major Poet Essay

Riley Pavelich
Major Poet Essay
Advanced Comp.
24 January 2008

Biography


Perhaps one of the most prolific and widely read poets of all time, Emily Dickinson has finally earned fame. During her lifetime, her poems, on the rare occasion one was printed, were edited almost out of recognition. She was heavily criticized because she did not use conventional techniques, and her poems usually did not have titles. She would occasionally throw in a comma, a capital letter, or a period which caused more traditional writers confusion.


Emily was born in Amherst, Massachusetts were she spent her entire life. Her family was rich and respected. She was a brilliant student. As Emily grew older she left homeless, until eventually she never did again. She was known in her town as being odd, and she added to this notion by only wearing white clothing. Frequently, she would write poems without telling anyone. In 1886 she died from a stroke. After her death, Emily's younger sister was shocked to find thousands of untitled poems which she later published.

Review of Critical Essays

When researching Emily Dickinson, it is useful to read Cynthia Griffin Wolff’s critical essay. Ms. Wolff seems to be a feminist who admires Emily more for her gender than her writing. It is true that Emily is praise-worthy for standing up for her art and being brave enough to write poetry; however, her real claim to fame is her poetry. Ms. Wolf acknowledges this when she writes, “Irrefutable ‘Immortality’ resides in the work of art itself” (Wolff 11). When Wolff writes this she means that Emily’s poems will last forever, and her spirit and soul live on through them.

Analysis of One Poem

Emily Dickinson was an individual. She wrote using her own original style, and refused to sacrifice her uniqueness. Although she rarely left home, when one reads her poems she seems worldly and sophisticated. She is admired as both woman and a poet.

Most of Emily Dickinson’s poems have no titles, so most people identify them by the first line of each poem. “Hope is the thing with feathers” addresses Emily’s idea that hope is like a bird that is forever with humanity. It can not be seen or heard, but it is undeniably felt. The speaker in this poem, who seems to be Emily herself, comes off like someone who is very vulnerable. It seems as if she has had to rely on herself for comfort.

The images this poem evokes are very striking. The reader could envision a little robin sitting on every person’s shoulder. A powerful phrase is in the last stanza when Emily writes, “Yet, never, in extremity/ it asked a crumb from me” (11-12). This section is a play on words. The imaginary bird has never asked to be fed, but also hope comes naturally to all humans, and there is no price to pay for it. This poem makes the reader feel as if he will never be deserted by his robin, and together they can get through anything. Also, when others have forsaken somebody, he can count on himself and hope to pull through.

What would a woman who has lived in the same town, in the same house for her entire life know about needing hope? When Emily writes that she has felt hope “in the chillest land” and “on the strangest sea,” the reader must ask himself if this is true (9-10). Her personal struggles with depression, family, and love must have been overwhelming to her.

Emily was often criticized for her unconventional rhythms; however, in “Hope is the thing with feathers,” she uses end rhythms to her great advantage, which makes reading it easier and more enjoyable.

Overview of 3 Poems

In Emily Dickinson’s poem “I’m nobody! Who are you?” she tries to justify her lack of success in the literary world. When she writes “How dreary to be somebody/ How public, like a frog,” she is referring to the fact that nobody knows her name beyond her family and friends (5-6). She says that to be known would, in fact, be more distressing than pleasing.

Among Emily’s many poems about death, “Because I could not stop for Death,” is by far the most famous. She writes about a fanciful situation where Death picks her up in a carriage, and together they drive towards “eternity.” The poem is dark, but yet she does not seem too upset that she is dying. Rather, to her, it appears to be a release from the duty of living.

Emily’s bitterness about not being successful is a reoccurring theme in her writings. In the poem “Success is counted sweetest,” she writes about those people who are frequently successful do not value their achievements. She seems to be alluding to herself when she wrote “To comprehend a nectar/ Requires sorest need” (3-4). Apparently she felt she had the “sorest need.” Her loyalty to her art-form though prevented her from being frequently published. She would have had more success in her life time if she was willing to edit her poems.

Evaluation of Poet

Emily Dickinson was a master of her craft. She is arguably one of the most famous and influential poets of all time. When her poems were finally published, they inspired generations of writers. Her imagery is intriguing and beautiful; not a word or phrase is without meaning. Although, poems she wrote are short and deceivingly simple, they speak to any reader with imagination and appreciation of beauty.

Bog Queen

1. Who is speaking?
In "Bog Queen" the speaker is a dead bog body.

2. What characterizes the speaker? What is the speaker like?
The most important characteristic is that the speaker is dead. I also think the speaker was royalty because it was wearing a diadem.

3. To whom is he or she speaking?
I think the speaker was talking to its family or just to itself.

4. What is the speaker's emotional state?
The speaker sounds a little traumatized and quite sad.

5. Why is he or she speaking?
The bog body is speaking to relieve it's gloom, or maybe just to end the silence of the bog.

6. What situation is being described?
The situation is that this old bog body was found by a person digging peat.

7. What are the conflicts or tensions in this situation?
One conflict is this person digging her up has cut into her. Another conflict is that the bog body was mistreated before she died.

8. How is the setting--social situation, physical place, and time--important to the speaker?
I think the social setting is important to the story because at the time this woman died, throwing sacrificial victims or criminals into the bog was customary.

9. What ideas does the speaker communicate?
The speaker seems to me not to enjoy being dead. Another idea I got from the story was that this person was so undesirable when they died, a cast off. but when the body was re-dug thousands of years later it was considered special and the utmost care was taken of it.

Anteus

1. Who is speaking?
Death is speaking. Or maybe Antaeus himself, the giant that gained his strength from being in contact with the land.

2. What characterizes the speaker? What is the speaker like?
I think the speaker is evil and dark.

3. To whom is he or she speaking?
I think the speaker is addressing humanity.

4. What is the speaker's emotional state?
I don't think death can have an emotional state, but maybe proud and haughty.

5. Why is he or she speaking?
I think Death is speaking to warn hero's that Death cannot be defeated.

6. What situation is being described?
There isn't really a situation being described. The picture I get is a black clothed god sitting in a cave reflecting to himself.

7. What are the conflicts or tensions in this situation?
One of the major tensions, I think is Death telling all who have tried to escape him that he is inevitable.

8. How is the setting--social situation, physical place, and time--important to the speaker?
I think the speaker is sitting in a deep dark cave, which is important because darkness and dreariness personify death.

9. What ideas does the speaker communicate?
The speaker communicates that death is inevitable, and that try as we puny mortals might, we will never beat it.

Poem Background

So Many Colors to Be

So Many Colors to Be

I am red
Bright, vivid, exciting red
I talk and I argue
I laugh and learn
I don’t just exist, I live
Passionate to a fault
I know where I’m going,
But no time for regrets
Like a red robin
I sing the song I was born to sing
Sometimes I am Purple
I open my eyes and see everything
How did the world get like this?
Did I cause it?
Everything is deep and dark
There is no clarity
Only shades of grey
I feel the need to pray
But I don’t give up on Humanity
Tomorrow is a new day

The Toliet Dilemma

Riley Pavelich
Essay
Advanced comp
19 November 2007

The Toilet Dilemma

Toilet seats were made to stay down. When some inconsiderate male leaves the seat up it requires extra time and effort by the next female that uses the pot to put it down. Plus we have to touch the disgusting, germ-ridden thing.

Some have said that the whole toilet seat situation is no big deal. Why should we care it the seat is up, it doesn’t hurt anyone? Wrong. What happens to the poor, unsuspecting woman who feels nature’s call in the middle of the night? I’ll tell you. It’s dark. She doesn’t turn on the light. She assumes the seat is down. She sits. She falls straight into the bowl. Her husband, incomparable jerk that he is, comes to see what all the noise is about. He finds her horrid predicament hilarious. She divorces the douche bag. Do you see the harm in it now?

Putting the seat down would irradiate this whole nasty business. If all males did this, they would suddenly find their significant others more loving and affectionate. With the current state of affairs it’s almost as if woman’s suffrage never happened. Putting the seat down is demeaning. Every time we do it we risk contracting syphilis, gonorrhea, and pink eye. If you males did this one little thing, it would bring us one step closer to equality.

So the next time one of you chauvinistic pigs leave it up, be reminded of what you do to us. We are exposed to diseases and have to waste our valuable time. I purpose that we round up every scumbag that has ever left the seat up and dip them in a pool of hydrochloric acid. Only then will our gender know true and lasting freedom.

Short Story

Riley Pavelich
Short Story
Advanced Comp.
6 November 2007

The Bathroom Miracle

I woke up with a start from a good dream. The clock on my table read 5:30, so I snuggled back into bed to try to remember. I had been on one of those old school dating game shows, where there are three guys and the girl who gets to choose one of them. I was the girl, and the men from my dream all looked like the offspring of Brad Pitt, were deeply sensitive, and loved to clean. A perfect dream.

At a more reasonable hour I munched on my cornflakes and decided that my dream was an omen. Today was the day I was going to get a boyfriend. I dialed Jill and told her to meet me at the mall in an hour.

After a quick shower and seven different outfits, I was ready to go. My t-shirt covered my pudge but showed off my chest, and my thunder thighs were concealed in my favorite jeans. My face looked like a pepperoni pizza, but that’s something I’ve just learned to live with.

Jill was waiting for me at the entrance. I think she raided her grandma’s closet before she came. Her glasses were about an inch thick, and I kid you not, she had kittens on her sweater. No teenager in her right mind would wear kittens! But she’s such a sweetheart that it doesn’t even matter. We’ve been best friends since we were three.

“That’s a really nice sweater. Does your grandma mind that you’re wearing it?” I asked her.

Jill, ever oblivious, said, “It’s not Nana’s. It’s mine, but thanks.”

With that we walked into that teenage-hormone fest that is the mall. As I explained our mission to Jill, I was already busy scoping out prospects. We searched all afternoon, but it was a complete failure. Every guy we saw either had a girlfriend or was definitely not dating material. Eventually we gave up, but before we left we stopped at the food court to regain our strength.

Jill and I sat with our huge cinnamon rolls at a table near the center so we would have the best view. Two tables away a group of two guys sat down. They were both from my school, but I didn’t know much about them. One was a football jock and really cute; the other one with black hair was a good distance runner, and always got the lead in the school play. I was attempting to use all the tips I had ever gathered from 17 magazines to get John’s, the football jock’s, attention. I flicked my hair, licked my lips, and laughed loudly. He didn’t even notice. Jill of course was completely useless. “Why are you laughing so loud,” she asked me. “It’s really annoying.”

But then, just when I was about to give up, he looked over. He smiled at me and waved. I waved back. He motioned at me to come. I stood up eagerly and started to walk toward him. At that moment the head cheerleader rushed passed me and flew into John’s outstretched arms. They looked at me; I guess they thought it was weird that I was standing two feet away from them when they wanted to make out in peace. I pretended that I was going to get another cup of coffee.

Of course, I couldn’t walk away from the coffee place without anything to drink, but I had already spent my money on the cinnabon. I searched through my purse to try and find some extra change so I could salvage what little dignity I had left. My coffee was two dollars and all I had was thirty cents in pennies. I heard groans in the line behind me as the sales clerk started to count it out. But then, like some sort of knight in khaki pants, Mike, the runner, slapped two bucks on the counter.

I turned to thank him. He had thought I was moving away and had stepped closer to me. I head butted him right in the nose. He laid on the ground, groaning in pain, a pool of crimson blood accumulating on the floor. All sounds in the food court were silenced, even the crying baby in the corner. My cheeks reddened under the stares of the bystanders. I turned and ran.
My eyes were blurry with tears. I fled blindly into the bathroom and locked myself into a stall. The stench of disinfectant and Pinesol added to my misery. Thankfully there were no other women there. I sobbed and sobbed. I would never get a boyfriend. I was a clumsy, ugly ogre, whom everyone hated. After about five minutes of this I heard a tapping on the door. A man’s voice called out,

“Um... Excuse me miss. Can I help you?” Now insult had been added to injury. Not only had someone heard me pouring out my soul, but it was a guy. I tried to compose myself a little and opened the door.

Standing there in a janitor’s uniform and with mop in hand was that boy from my biology class. He looked as embarrassed as I felt. He stammered, “I, uh, was cleaning in here. Didn’t you see the sign on the door?” Of course I hadn’t. I had been a little more concerned about other recent catastrophes at the time. I just shook my head.

“Well, are you okay?” he asked with genuine concern. He was just so nice about it that my whole story came tumbling out. He winced at all the right places, and he told me that he was on the track team with Mike and that Mike’s nose bled all the time. I felt a lot better.
Then he started to blush and haltingly inquired, “Well, this might be the wrong time to ask, but what are you doing Saturday?”

By Riley Pavelich

Baldy Article

Junior High Sports

Both Volleyball and Football are underway for the Junior High kids. There have been some changes in the coaching staff, but it appears to be working out well.

The Volleyball Girls, all eleven of them, are being coached this year by Marley Meredith. She lives and works in Plains. This is her first time coaching, but it looks like she’s doing a great job. The girls, including Rachel Gravely, Shaelle King, Alyssa Foster, Kelsie Rogers, Erin Schmiedbauer, Mackenzie McCoy, Meara and Laurel Schmiedbaur, Alex Green, Amanda Woods, and Rosa Dolson, have a 3-1 record as of yet.

“I’m seeing improvement every day,” say Coach Meredith.

The Footballers are also doing well.
Assistant Coach Clairmont says that “They’re a lot of fun to coach. They’re like sponges, the soak everything up.”

There are 29 kids on the team. Hot Springs is represented by Drew Payne, Matt Holman, Dylan Skellenger, Michael Gray, Elyjah Yagong-Weber, and Wyatt Nagy. They are coached by Thom Chisholm.

Come out and see the kids play! Everyone is having a lot of fun this year!

Top Ten Vocab...

1. Debacle-A complete Failure
Her cake was an utter debacle after she forgot to add the sugar and burned it to a crisp.

2. Bestial- Savage, brutal
The bestial coach made his team run until every one of them puked.

3. Ephemeral-Short lived
Her ephemeral crush on Brad Pitt disappeared once she saw him in Troy.

4. Deviate- To stray from a course
Sometimes when you deviate from your training routine, the best results are attained.

5. Perspicacity- Keenness of judgement
I wanted to buy the car, but my perspicacity told me to ask for a better price.

6. Enervate- To weaken
His constant apologies enervated my resolve to stay angry at him forever.

7. Pedestrian-Ordinary
He dressed in pedestrian clothing to avoid being noticed by his adoring fans.

8. Diaphanous- Sheer, light
The diaphanous look of the cloth identified it as expensive.

9. Parochial- Local, narrow
The small towns only restaurant offered only a parochial range in it's cuisine.

10. Carrion- Dead flesh
The carrion on the dessert highway let off a terrible stench.

Cliche Poster

Old Cliches Revisited

Don't Rock the Boat- Don't Hit an Iceberg

Easier Said than Done- Easier to Plan a Heist than get the Jewels

Food for Thought- Cerebral Veggies

In a Nutshell- In a Picture Book

Raining Cats and Dogs- Someone Build an Ark

Grin and Bear it- Pretend you Don't Have a Wedgie

Flat as a Pancake- Flat as Week Old Soda

In the Nick of Time- One Infinitesimal Second Before Disaster Struck

Better Late than Never- Better to Receive a five dollar check from your great grandma seven months after your birthday than nothing

Writers Moment:Review of Essay

I like my essay. I thought doing the research and incorporating my findings into the essay was a valuable experience. There were some things I would like to change, but overall I am pleased. I thought that it was a little too structured and stiff for my tastes, and it followed a very strict formula. But when you write in a different style than your own you improve.

Persuasive Essay

Riley Pavelich
Persuasive Essay
Advanced Comp.
9 September 2007
Abortion: Bestial or Indispensable?

I do not think anyone has ever said, “Killing babies is right.” That is because it is not. But being wrong and being necessary are two different things. Although it may be morally wrong to kill an unborn child, it might be the only option for some women. Some issues to consider are, the horror of self-inflicted or inadequate abortions, the financial strain of raising a child and the unreasonable demands unaborted babies would place on foster care systems.

If you are willing to stick a wire clothes hanger into your body to be rid of your child, I am sure the issues of legality will not stop you from doing it. It has been estimated that before abortion was legal, as many as 5,000 women died because of poorly preformed abortions. If doctors are not allowed to do it, there will always be someone less skilled willing. If the women are determined to have it done they should get the proper care. Thousands of women died as a direct result of outlawing abortion.

What kinds of women get abortions? Many think the answer to that question is selfish women who do not want the baby because it would reflect poorly on them. However, 48.2% of women who get abortions have family incomes of less than $29,999 per year, and 64.4% are never married women. For a single parent living in the west, it takes an average of $187,408 to raise a kid. That is from birth to age 18. That does not even include college. For the babies’ first year, it’s estimated to cost $7,568. I do not need to tell you that that is quite a big chunk of cash for someone who makes less than 30 thousand a year.

Many people think that all unwanted babies should go to foster care or adoption agencies. I personally would like to see that happen, but it is not realistic. If all the aborted babies were born, there wouldn’t be enough room or funding in foster care to take care of them all. In the U.S., there are 1.37 million legal abortions per year. Worldwide there are 46 million. There are not enough people that want children to adopt all these kids, and I am not even factoring in all the illegal abortions, which is estimated to be about 20 million. Even if there were enough people willing to adopt children, what about the ones with birth defects? The adoption rates for mentally disabled children are not high.

Please do not think that I support abortion. It might not be the right option, but it needs to stay an option. Without abortion how many mothers would be dead, how would the babies be financially taken care of, how many kids would flounder in adoption agencies? The consequences are too much to risk. So even if you would never get one, do not condemn those who do.

Writing Sample

Riley Pavelich
Writing Sample
Adv. Comp.
24 August 2007

Once, far before man, there was just the sun. For many years there was just the sun. The sun had a lively soul and being alone didn't suit him, so he formed the planets. His favorite planet was Earth by far, so he decide to bestow her with a gift. Out of his rays of light he formed the first man. Man was created in the suns own image. These beings never slept or felt weariness. Because these people were incessant they soon became an exceedingly advanced civilization, far further than we have come. This society became so intoxicated by their own success that they set out to live on, and improve, other planets. Sun disapproved of his creatures ventures because he didn't want his gift to Earth to leave her. In an angry rage, he smote all the advanced beings and spared only those who had stayed with Earth. Only the deformed or stupid survived. Sun felt he had to punish even those he had left. That is why Sun hides from us part of every day. Without his warm glow we are forced to rest. Our civilization is evolving much slower than those before us because we are forced to submit to sleep. Plus, our ancestors were the really dumb ones.

Persuasive Essay Sources

1.) http://www.abortionfacts.com/statistics/us_stats_abortion.asp

2.) http://www.prochoice.org/cfc/about_cfc.html

3.) http://www.voicesofchoice.org/transcripts/carole_joffe.shtml

4.)http://www.abortionno.org/Resources/fastfacts.html

5.) http://www.census.gov/Press-Release/cb98-176.html