Friday, September 7, 2007
Freewrite: Persuasive Essay
What do I want to write about. Oh, I guess more money for education. To me this seems like a no brainer. I mean, Why not? We'd get a better work force and a better economy. where would the money come from? I don't know. The army. Iraq. How much money have we poured in there? Billions and billions. I don't think anyone besides georgebush wants to be there still. So, a billion dollars. Pay teachers better or get better books. but better books don't necccesarily mean better students. I think better teachers do though.no I'm out of Ideas. nicer desks. with cushions on the seats. actually i think that would be a completely ridiculous expense, but it would be nice to have. Yay school. its so nice to be able to come to a place where the main focus is to learn. that's pretty cheesy. sometimes i just accidentally go really cheesy on myself. Now I'm envisioning a person covered with the nacho cheese they serve at the games. ewe. it's yummy cheese, though. probably horrible for you. Now I'm completely off subject I don't even know how I got to nacho cheese. but now I'm making myself hungry. what do I want for lunch? nothing that the school is serving. that's an area that could be improved in school. I mean, I don't think you think the best when your loaded down with greasy dehydrated food.and alot of the time the salad bar is nice. i wish we didn't have ice berg lettuce. no one would eat if it was just health food, but maybe if the cooks actually cooked the food as opposed to defrosting it, it might make a difference. there wouldn't be all those gross, but actually delicious, preservatives. that movie super size me grossed me out alot. and something like percent of Americans are obese. How is that possible? You're in the minority if you're healthy. it's sad.i never want to be like that, but then again I don't want to be a freak and never let myself have ice cream or an extra serving of dinner. But it does scare me. I think I'm about free wrote out. i have no more thoughts. my head is an empty vessel. my neck itches. hahahah. not really funny, just fact. can humans get fleas. do you have to be really dirty or something? have you ever seen those hidden camera hotel busts where they reveal all the gross things .
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2 comments:
Riley,
This is a great freewrite. Even if you went off topic more than once, you kept writing and explored many different issues that interested you.
Of the subjects that emerged from this process, which one interest you the most? It seems as if you're more passionate about the issues of health and nutrition, rather than funding for education. Or is that just an environmental factor, considering you were probably hungry for lunch?
It is okay to explore many different areas of interest in a freewrite, but please try to bring it back to the topic at hand at some point.
As a adept critical thinker, you do indeed have some skills in analyzing and questioning. My only recommendation is be careful about not just skimming the surface of serious topics that interest you, but rather challenge yourself to investigate your topic almost to the point of becoming an expert. Your mind has the potential to not only hold a vast wealth of information, but with practice you can use such knowledge to attack and defeat any engaged opponent.
Such mental annihilation requires great commitment. You can do it!
HEY RILEY!! I AM NOT IN YOUR CLASS BUT WHO CARES?? I AM COMMMMENTING YOU ANYWAYS! WELL I GUESS I WILL SEE YA IN THE HALL PRETTY SOON!!
MACKENZIE
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